2.5⭐️
Honestly, it was a bit of a mixed bag for me. For a debut book, it was fine, but there were some things that just didn't sit right.
The premise of the book was great, but the execution... not so much. The plot felt all over the place, more like a telenovela thrown together without much thought. Some inconsistencies were explained later on (kind of), but it didn’t make up for the scattered feel of the story. The plot was just there for the sake of being there, without much substance to it.
The characters didn’t really grow throughout the story. We’re told about their backgrounds and feelings, but we never actually get to see them evolve or develop. They felt pretty flat and one-dimensional. also Zach did not hold a handle to Nico Russo. I fear no mafia man will be able to.
One thing that really got on my nerves was the main character's age. Is she 20 or 21? It kept switching, and it was super distracting and noticeable. Small details like this matter and can really pull you out of the story. Case in point: me noticing and being annoyed.
The authors writing style was okay, but it relied too much on telling rather than showing. I want to experience the characters’ emotions and backgrounds through their actions and dialogue, not just be told about them. The interactions between characters often felt forced and didn’t flow naturally.
While I enjoy telenovela-style drama sometimes, the way it was done here didn’t work for me. One "plot twist" felt randomly thrown in there and added to the disjointed feel.
Another frustrating part was how the male lead handled a major issue in their relationship. When he found out something that could make or break their relationship, instead of talking it out, he just assumed the worst. His attempt at communication was asking if she had anything to say, and when she said no, he jumped to conclusions and said some crazy things to her later on. When the truth came out, he did a little bit of apologising and was SHOWN to appear devastated, and even though she didn't take him back right away, he just showed up later to "help tie up loose ends." Like if you’re going to attempt to make the FMC have a backbone at least follow through with it. After that, because of certain things that happened, she's all like, "I can’t be without him." It wasn't THAT much of an issue, but I still wish he groveled a bit more especially post what happened.
All in all, the book has a promising concept, but it falls short in execution. With better character development and a more structured plot, the authors future works could definitely improve, which would be great since I do want to read about the other characters. This one gets a 2.5 out of 5 from me for effort and potential, but it didn’t quite hit the mark.