Space can be very intimidating, especially if you are three feet tall and weigh at best forty pounds. He chuckled at his own facial expression reflecting on the inside of his helmet, and corrected his escape pod’s trajectory with the last drops of fuel. Were they drops? Most probably not. It was outer space, and the pod’s gravity plating was long drained out of power. So, blobs? Perhaps, or maybe the fuel tank had some device that enabled it to utilize even the last bits of fuel remaining. He just had to check that. His tiny frame would allow him to do so. The hamster began imagining how exactly he would crawl through the engine exhaust chamber and disassemble the fuel injector to reach the fuel tank, if he were to follow his curiosity...
Starshatter is the first book of a new, vibrant and exciting space opera series inspired by 80's Sci-fi. It is the year 2018 by Earth's calendar. The Terran Imperial Minarchy faces enemies on all sides and has but a few precious allies. Its small, decimated by a previous pirate invasion population, is now strengthened by a multitude of uplifted animal species. The humans and their newly created brothers in sentience chose to colonize Fringe Space - a large expanse rife with piracy, slavery and a multitude of other dangers. Ruled by arrogant Pirate Lords and drug running Cartels, its current masters are poised to permanently deal with the uppity, freedom-loving Terrans. Especially those in the employ of the mighty Taz'aran Empire.
From the fertile imagination of The Dark Knight comes a collection of powerful characters whose stories are enthralling and entertaining! Readers will meet Lilly, who is resourceful and tough as nails, somewhat of a surprise when one considers she is a bunny. There is also Dozan'Re, a giant and fearsome warrior who can rally an exhausted and nearly broken people into successfully defending all that they have left against evil intruders bent on destroying their way of life. The telepathic and powerful Boris disciplines himself for years in a forced labor camp in order to one day be free and avenge the souls of so many unfortunate slaves who were with him in the camp. These are but a few examples of the characters populating The Dark Knight's first literary foray, and he has given them all interesting backstories as well as setting up nicely for the next books in his series. At present, these entities are gathered together on the spaceship "Starshatter" after battling aliens, pirates, and terrible, near-impossible odds. The Dark Knight has a style that keeps the reader's attention as he weaves this prime Sci-Fi series start-up, never once dull or redundant. I truly enjoyed this entire book, and can't wait to see what the next in the series will be like as the Knight takes us on a treacherous adventure through space and its many hazards. Starshatter earns five stars for its creativity and stellar writing!
I just finished reading Starshatter, written by Black Knight. I was fortunate enough to be able to read a chapter on Minds.com. Typically, Sci-Fi is not my go to genre, however, I found myself hooked!
A futuristic view snatching little tidbits of current realities and blending it into a well crafted story leading you into visualizing and relating to this parallel universe. This was an excellent read!
This book is the foundation of the series. Getting to know each member of the Starshatter and what drives them to forge ahead despite the soul crushing adversity that has befallen them is truly inspirational.
Epic Battles fought against oppression at times leave you on the edge,but there are allies that help along the way that instills hope when needed.
Impossible for me to choose a favorite character but has me questioning a few and the secrets that they may carry and will loyalties hold. Looking forward to Book 2 - Twin Suns of Carrola!
I really enjoyed this book. Somehow it feels like Sci-fy and slightly Steampunk, but still very futuristic. Set in 2018, it's tough to decide when our universe and the Starshatter universe diverged, but it seems to be right about the time of WW2. It's a little choppy in delivery, but chalk that up to the author having English as his second language. Still a great read with lots of action, adventure, exotic places and aliens, awesome technology, interesting characters, and to top it all off, this book mostly just sets the groundwork for books that come after! If you're looking for a long running series in the making, then look no further!
Starshatter is one of the most involving science fiction novels I have read. Every character is so well developed that each origin story stands alone as a fantastic read. This tale weaves together fantasy and nostalgia so well you'll be ready to launch right into to entire series after enjoying this epic fantasy. If you haven't started your adventure with Captain Anit'za already you're missing out.
I received this book from a promotion on Minds.com I enjoyed this introduction to the series. Each of the characters are unique and I look forward to seeing their interaction in the next books. If you are into SF set in a universe of interesting characters you should start this series.
Before I begin my review allow me to ramble for a bit. For 5 or 6 years now we've been watching multiple attempts to murder entertainment. Games, movies, TV series and books have been put on the altar of "political correctness". Interesting characters, stories and ideas have been sacrificed, hammered by vitriol and deemed "inappropriate" in some way, replaced by grotesque ideas of what constitutes a "good" story/character. Idiotic "morals" have been shoved down our throats and if we do not accept them then we must be...you know what - here's a hat - pick out a feminist insult. And amid all this "virtue signaling" the entertainment industry forgot how to entertain, how to have fun. That is exactly what I got reading this book. You like the characters because they are likable, not because you are to told to. Villains are villains because they have their reasons, not because the are villains ergo you must hate them(in fact, I found myself cheering for one of the faggots. Seriously, he is such a scumbag that I can't not cheer for him). In short, I had fun. Being the first book, it is obviously a stepping stone for the series and it mainly introduces the characters and setting but that doesn't mean it is devoid of action or heart. The action takes place in an alternate universe where humanity has reached and is actively exploring the final frontier. I don't want to go into details as this is something you should discover for yourself but suffice to say: before, during and after the Second World War things unfold very differently. But humans quickly discover that they are not welcomed among most of the alien spacefaring species: pirates, slavers, drug cartels and other alien empires stand between humanity and peaceful life. Thankfully they are not alone in the fight for survival as they are aided by species they have helped uplift into sentience: gorillas, bunnies and hamsters, and other alien races - each with their own unique ideals, quirks and way of thinking. I firmly believe it is important for an author to take their time and establish the characters and setting first, before truly beginning the journey as the gravitas on any events would not be able to sink in if we are still familiarizing ourselves with the heroes and what makes them "tick". And, luckily, this is the case here - the book follows ten(-ish, again I do not want to spoil anything) characters, each from different walks of life: from a slave working in a godforsaken mine to a gunslinging girl on a sacred mission. Each of them unique in their own way. At the end you will undoubtedly have at least one or two favourites. This is something special as at no point does the book slap you over the head and point at the "true" hero who you are supposed to cheer for and ignore the rest. Instead there are subtle hints that each character will go through their own arc with their own struggles and victories. Through their viewpoints we are allowed to explore the world of Starshatter in all its horror and glory.
On the opposite end of the scale stand, of course, the villains - they come in different shapes and sizes but at the forefront are the soldiers from the Taz'aran Empire. Needless to say they are not happy that a part of the galaxy where they were free to do as they please is suddenly occupied by filthy aliens who have the audacity to refuse being enslaved and killed. Now, I've seen some people say the villains are disappointing or not smart enough. And therein lies the simple brilliance - space is big, yes it sounds funny but it is none the less true, there is place for all types of people. Just the way support or secondary characters are a thing, why should the same not be valid for the villains? I would say - patience, Rome was not build in a day. Just as the heroes begin their journey from the first book, so do the villains, it is only fair after all. Being three books deep into the series, I fondly revisit this book as my favourite scumbag starts his journey to greatness here. What I immensely enjoyed was the sense of scale that very few fictional worlds manage to pull off. The author fully realizes that space is actually big. It might sound funny but it is something hard to present to a reader and the only other time I've seen it successfully implemented is in the Warhammer 40k universe. From a close firefight on an abandon station to the daring boarding of pirate spaceship, to giant mechs fighting to help secure an entire planet - the action flows on many levels. Through the fights and character introductions, typical for the beginning of a grand space opera, Shtarshatter shows another side - that of a hard science fiction novel. I believe that the "why" is key to any science fiction work. How does the universe and technology work and why they work that way - the different types of weapons, ships and mechs, how they are constructed, their strong and weak sides. The book does this masterfully as the answers to such questions slowly unfold but the exposition is well implemented so it does not overstay its welcome.
When it is all said and done, this is a great introduction to a grim universe which however is not devoid of hope and laughter. Where, on the surface, simple ideas are introduced which turn out to be far deeper. Where the reasons to fight are not for theological or philosophical questions, but for simple survival, not only physical but for one's humanity as well. Where the idea to lay your body on the line to save your loved ones, your children is not scoffed at but celebrated. I do not claim to be a writer or a critic, just a dude who appreciates and gets true joy out of being told a great story. I really had fun so I urge you to take up a weapon and buckle up next to me - we're in for a great ride.
Starshatter, author Black Knight's first effort, is the name of a Terran spaceship outfitted for war in the vacuum of space and designed to keep the peace by confronting invaders and space pirates. The ship is operated and maintained by a crew of Terran humans, uplifted Terran lower animals, and the lofty intelligence of distributed AI.
"Uplifted" is a term from David Brin's marvelous sci-fi where species of lower intelligence are helped by a superior species to actually raise their IQ, or consciousness, or whatever you want to call it. So that's how Mr. Black Knight has written intelligent rabbits and hamsters into his narrative. It's all in good fun and reminds me somewhat of the Guardians of the Galaxy sci-fi/fantasy movie series.
The action starts on the first page and doesn't let up for a second. The reader is thrown into a space battle that reads like an old-time account of a naval conflict between opposing ships. The account swings from one side to the other so the reader is treated to both sides of the story as characters are introduced whilst in the throes of space combat. Great fun!
There was a problem in downloading the most current version of Starshatter and I did not get the latest until after I had completed the book. The version I had was indeed a bit dodgy with a wandering storyline that left me at times wondering where Mr. Knights' narrative was leading.
Well, as it turns out, Starshatter leads to the Twin Suns of Corolla, which I have not yet consumed but look forward to reading. The Black Knight plans on writing a ten book series with the same characters and in the same sci-fi universe. Good luck to Mr. Knight and I hope to see him soon on Amazon's bestseller list.
PS Here is a blurb from an earlier review that would help prior to reading Starshatter:
"It is the year 2018 by Earth's calendar. The Terran Imperial Minarchy faces enemies on all sides and has but a few precious allies. Its small, decimated by a previous pirate invasion population, is now strengthened by a multitude of uplifted animal species. The humans and their newly created brothers in sentience chose to colonize Fringe Space - a large expanse, rife with piracy, slavery and a multitude of other dangers. Ruled by arrogant Pirate Lords and drug running Cartels, its current Masters are poised to permanently deal with the uppity, freedom-loving Terrans. Especially those in the employ of the treacherous and mighty Taz'aran Empire. Fast paced heroic action sci-fi pulp. Think something Edgar Rice Burroughs might have written if he was a fan of H. Beam Piper, Catshit One, and Macross."
Starshatter is a collection of action-packed short stories that are really fun to read. Each story serves as the origin story of a character who will eventually form the crew of the Starshatter. Considering each short story on its own, the stories are well written, exciting, and there are moments that really pull at your heartstrings. My favorite character is Anit'za. He's had the most opportunity to let his personality shine and his reactions to situations are a joy to read. I'm looking forward to seeing him in future adventures.
SPOILER WARNING!
I think the plot progression could have been stronger if, at the end of each story, each character is shown heading off to the asteroid colony where they will run into an eccentric and fabulously dressed captain who makes them an offer to join him on a galaxy-saving mission. This would make it clear at the end of each origin story what the overall story is leading towards: building up an awesome crew to embark on a galaxy-saving mission. Kinda like Mass Effect 2, if you've ever played that game. By having a clear end goal, this creates a sense of plot-progression as readers finish reading each origin story.
Overall, Starshatter is an enjoyable read. It doesn't ever get boring. I recommend it. I look forward to finally seeing the crew in action together in the next book, Twin Suns of Carrolla.
Black Knight and his Starshatter series is proof that the art of writing Science Fiction is not dead.
Starshatter builds a vibrant universe full of diverse cultures, inspiring individuals and daunting challenges to explore. The cast is full of unique characters rich in personality as well as personal flaws they must embrace or overcome and I challenge any reader to find a member of the Crew you can dislike.
And don't you worry, this isn't a cuddly space romp...you're going to meet hostile aliens and evil humans... visceral space battles between might flagships, ace pilot duels in fighter craft, mecha battles, and don't forget about planetside warfare.
While reading this book you'll find yourself smiling, holding your breathe and tearing up. I couldn't order book 2 (Twin Suns of Carrola) fast enough when I finished Starshatter...you'll love it.
Starshatter does not start out boring you with a slow intro, it opens quickly and immerses you in the action. The action is fast but still with the right amount of suspense. The book is set in an alternate time and world that begins mimicking our own but takes us down a far different path. Each chapter was a new character and story which might have lost me but by the time I had gone two paragraphs into the next chapter I was hooked to the next. By the time I finished I had realized the connection of the stories and I was hungry for the next book in the series.
I recommend this book by Black Knight for any Science Fiction lover out there and look forward to Black Knights success with the series.
NO SPOILERS - Sci-fi with a detailed world and compelling characters, good and bad - thank Christ. The writer has a knack for quick, vivid descriptions that pull you into the scenes and confront the reader with the war-torn locations and populace of his universe. There are surprises here, but not just for the sake of them. His exposition is concise and blends well as you follow a character through their thoughts and actions. The gadgets are cool and the science has the traditional cautionary feel. At around 150 pages, and the first part of a series, it's worth picking up.
I'm not a regular Science Fiction reader, but I loved this book. There are dynamic characters, engaging stories, and thrilling battle scenes. On top of that, Starshatter reinforces heroic traditional values that have come under attack in our dystopian clown world of globalist tyranny. This book is filled with beautiful and touching moments that are beyond my expectations for the genre. It hits you right in the feels.
Starshatter is quite a unique book in many regards. Firstly, it takes its inspiration from 80s sci-fi and is set in an alternate universe with its own unique history. For example, humans became a race of widespread spacefarers in the 1960s. (More on this later.) Secondly, it features uncommon anthropomorphic animal races that take the form of “uplifted” Earth animals. In addition, it’s written to exhibit strongly patriotic and pro-human themes uncommon in many modern works. The Bulgarian author also didn’t shy away from including some strongly pro-Bulgarian sentiments. Fourthly, it doesn’t follow a single narrative. Instead, each chapter follows a different character with their own conflicts, but all threads come together at the end. You see, Starshatter isn’t a book meant to be read alone. It’s the story of how the crew of the titular ship assembles. It’s meant to introduce core characters and set up future installments.
The crew itself is also rather unique. In addition to its near-human captain, the crew contains an anthropomorphic gorilla, hamster, and rabbit; telepaths; humans; an AI; a near-human woman; a giant Asgardian (like those from Norse myth); and a feline alien. An actual cat was also recruited to join the crew since cats in this universe are considered just as much part of the crew as their sentient counterparts. In fact, Black Knight’s love of cats is readily apparent.
The author’s writing style is also unique. Instead of the third-person-limited and show-don’t-tell style now standard in the West, Black Knight instead uses the opposite. By that, I mean a third-person-omniscient, tell-don’t-show style rare and discouraged in the West but apparently standard in Eastern Europe. This may turn off some readers or at the very least be somewhat jarring to those familiar with the Western-European style.
The book, unfortunately, has flaws in storytelling. One big flaw is that the enemies are weak and are basically cannon fodder for each chapter’s heroes. There’s no single, overall villain that challenges the heroes. In fact, while present, enemy commanders are typically different in each chapter and don’t amount to much. Instead, there are multitudes of incompetent, nameless enemies of mostly the same, almost-cartoonishly evil race of aliens. Each chapter’s main character slaughters them with apparent ease. While a nefarious villain isn’t always required, weak villains typically make for weak heroes. This makes the heroes seem overpowered and almost invincible, which can negatively affect their believability and relatability. Regardless, there are definite moments in each chapter where the reader will cheer with the heroes at their successes.
Another major flaw in the book is its repetitiveness. In the majority of cases, each chapter’s hero starts their daily life normally. Then the evil race shows up and attacks. The hero then slaughters wave after wave of hopelessly incompetent enemies with little or no difficulty. Then a single, extremely competent and dangerous enemy appears, gives the hero a challenging fight, and then is defeated. After these fights, the hero is usually bloodied and near death. They’re then rescued or escape. After a while, the story gets fairly predictable.
The third and last major flaw is Black Knight’s insistence on info dumping the characters’ backstories, even when they’re irrelevant to the current conflicts. This may cause some frustrations for the reader, especially those familiar with other styles requiring information to be inserted with great care. This info dumping isn’t restricted to character histories. Black Knight doesn’t hesitate to share entire episodes from the setting’s history itself. This may include alien invasions in Earth’s history or how spacer culture formed.
A minor issue some readers may also have is the multitude of long paragraphs. While this won’t be a deal-breaker, some may find it irksome.
While there are some major issues with the author’s writing style, the book has many, many positives to draw praise. The chief among them is Black Knight’s strong, pro-human philosophy. In this setting, humans are a noble, strongly pro-freedom race. They’re strong, loyal, defiant, and yet also somehow humble. Humans will fight to the death to ensure not only their individual freedom but also those of others—human or not. They’re also so intolerant of enslavement that they’d rather take their own lives rather than endure enslavement. (Most humans, at least.) In the history of the Starshatter-verse, humanity long ago banded together to eradicate socialism, communism, and slavery from every domain under their influence. This is something unique since Black Knight—unlike many, many contemporary writers—has a clearly positive outlook on humanity and its potential. Unfortunately, this outlook is uncommon at best and rare at worst. It’s truly a relief to see this sentiment in modern writing.
Another major selling point for the book is the characters. While many chapters are repetitive and the characters can be considered overpowered and nigh invincible, each character is unique and has their own quirks and charms. Many, if not all, are actually quite loveable. Among those that might be considered the most loveable are Lilly the bunny and Awesome the hamster (that’s his actual name).
Yet another major point that may interest readers is Black Knight’s clear disdain for socialism and communism. It was stated earlier that in his universe, both were eradicated long ago. However, he also includes political commentaries that pokes fun at or ridicules them or sheds light on some of the nonsensical or contradictory beliefs held by the real-world far left. While some readers may take “offense” at this, many others will rejoice.
There are other points in this book that the far left will despise. Among them are Black Knight’s traditional views on the relationship between men and women, masculinity, and femininity. Vasilisa is a good example of this. While she’s undoubtedly a strong woman, she’s also quite feminine, which some may strangely take issue with. Her chapter also revolves around her personal quest to find and secure a husband to dedicate herself to and have his children. As this point demonstrates, Black Knight is a strong advocate of traditionalism, and more examples abound in this book.
All in all, this is a good book to read and is set in an inspiring setting, which may hopefully encourage more of the same. If you endorse liberty, this book and its message are for you.
I would describe the book as imaginative, fun, exciting, and addictive. The characters are amazingly well developed, and there was a lot of attention to detail with regards to the setting and cultures in which it took place
I have already ordered book #2 of the series.
Now for a bit more meat:
This book felt more like an extended, but highly enjoyable, prologue since it mostly deals with world building and character introductions. This was totally necessary given the breadth of new content that the author is introducing.
The epilogue should not be skipped because that is where it all gets tied together. It also sets up the story nicely to move into a second book.
There are some **minor** things that were missed in the editing process, but nothing that detracts from the story or flow of the book. If you are prone to being a grammar stickler, put that aside when you see moments that are written in common vernacular instead of proper English. Just enjoy the ride.
There is a bit of foul language (very minimal, but it does exist) as well as a reference to nudity, but no glaring mature content. I believe this book would be suitable for an older teenager.
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TL;DR: go buy this book. Soon after, you'll find yourself adding the next book to your cart.
An Adventure of Fantasy and Fur Starshatter is only the beginning installment in a series that Black Knight hopes to bring to ten intertwined novels to tell an overarching story of fighting tyranny on a level rarely imagined before to such an extent.
The story line reminds me of C. S. Lewis and Tolkien themes, as well as ancient tales of the Hero, the myth and the struggle of man to overcome suffering at the hands of his own kind. But this story is different! It has furry little creatures, from cute hamsters and bunnies to powerful female gorillas, all intelligent. They've been gifted with sentience by their human friends to fight a battle of underdog against evil.
Human and otherworldly characters are already well developed in the very first novel. Black Knight hints to me that much more is to come. I'm sure there is and I can hardly wait to move on to the next story in the series, Twin Suns of Carrola.
First book in a series. The author establishes his characters really well, as well as a lot of the backstory of the alternate reality of Earth and humanity. There is the backdrop of an alien invasion that happened years before, but was followed by humanity spreading out into space, accompanied and supported by other friendly alien species.
I think I like it most because instead of being falsely optimistic like Star Trek’s vision of humankind being the most kind and benevolent when pacifist, this book (and subsequent ones in the series I have read) shows humanity at its best when it is fighting for what it loves, with fierce self-determination, free-will and an ingenuity that is without comparison.
I found this novel on Kindle. In my view Kindle is the modern day version of Pulp Novels from the last century which produced great writers such as Asimov, Heinlein, Lovecraft, Howard. Likewise, I think many great novelists and writers will emerge from Kindle for this century. Starshatter is the first of an ongoing series, set in a truly dark but detailed and complex galaxy. It initially reads like a set of short stories and has intense action which reminds me of Gemmell. This is engaging set up for an epic series with an amazing amount of action and information packed into this opening book. Reminiscent of that golden time of publishing and reading from last century. NWP.
This is written as an intro book with many short stories and sets the stage for all the coming action. I really enjoyed learning about the characters, the universe and even the baddies in this story. There are some great characters being developed here and the character backstory is going to propel these characters into some really interesting story arcs. I really enjoyed reading this book.
A creative first look at alternative universe similar to our own but drastically different in recent history. This book really sets the stage for is epic space adventure that continues past this book. As of this writing 6 books total my guess there is more to come.
His books are phenomenal, while I havnt read all of them, the ones I have read are indeed intriguing, the plot line along with the twist of characters makes the reader wonder what will happen next. Black Knight is very talented as well as insightful
Warrior Bunnies, Space Hamsters and Allegories on War: the Gems of Starshatter Shine!
From the first page, Starshatter challenges perceptions: 'What If?' becomes 'Why Not?' and the results are a fantasy romp through unrestrained space. Reminiscent of Doug Adams, the Author bounces us along, taking us from one fantastic scene to the next, with curious monsters and unlikely heroes. But as we float through the star-field with our intrepid crew, the greatest treasures for me were found in the small spaces...
Black Knight's Warriors are not just fighters, but beings who struggle with the trauma of war. How they deal with that trauma, and how they help each other is one of the reasons why Starshatter is beloved by so many. As a military mother, I found these to be Starshatter's greatest gems: vignettes of Warriors overcoming their challenges through the love and support of other Warriors.
The greatest Battles for Starshatter's heroes lies not on the battlefield, but within - and there is where the gems of Starshatter shine.
A great cast of characters are introduced in this space faring future where challenges call for intriguing solutions. I am looking forward to reading the follow up: Twin Suns of Corrola.
This book was an enjoyable read from beginning to end. More than once did I laugh out loud while reading it. There are some minor grammatical and spelling errors but considering English is not the authors first language they are easy to forgive. I would recommend this to anyone who would like to support an independent artist and who enjoys a good old sci-fi read.
I must admit I was more than pleasantly surprised and impressed with this book. The author not only appeals to the reader’s imagination but does a phenomenal job at character development. The ability to create strong connections to all the characters and instill an insatiable desire to know more about them, their future adventures and how they connect to one another is a masterful skill of the author indeed. The positive, “justice will prevail” ideal is woven like a fine garment threaded throughout the book’s array of characters. I just purchased the rest of the series. I wholeheartedly recommend this book. (I‘m sure I’ll feel the same for subsequent books in the series.) Should you, fellow readers, have a doubt about purchasing Starshatter - vanquish it. I expect you will be blissfully rewarded. Is a space adventure out if your genre? Give Starshatter the chance it deserves - the true gems are characters and you will likely find yourself silently or even out loud rooting for them! This first book left me wanting more. Quite brilliant Black Knight. Bravo! I have intimate knowledge of this craft and the hard work, thought and dedication required to achieve what you did. Black Knight captures the reader’s emotions. He commands the attention of his readers and wills into being a full-throttle drive to learn more about the universe he has finessed into existence. *claps hands, then hand to heart* Well done! Gunalchéesh!
I am adding this, because I have read other reviews, this awesome author is writing in his third language. English is his third language and yet he brings to the table such awesome character development and manages to capture readers and give them emotional connection to his characters. You find yourself rooting for them, cheering them on and in subsequent books, it only gets better.
I had fun reading this. This team building novel was interesting and lighthearted. The action was excellent.
I think my favourite characters were Dozan’Re - the speeches he gave as he was fighting was awesome because it changed the pace of the novel a lot. I hope to see more of him in the future.
I also identified with Kera a huge amount - as a HSP (Highly Sensitive Person), Black Knight had a very accurate portrayal of people who feel the pain and suffering of other people. She’s going to be an awesome balance for Boris who is so strategic and goal oriented - she’ll soften him to be more human.
But with most indie novels, there was an entire lack of polish and structure. I don’t want to be a downer here, it’s a fun read, but some of the paragraphs in this novel were 3 pages long.
Every paragraph should be just 1 topic - that’s grammar rules. There are too many examples I could pull from the novel that break that rule.
Sometimes he would introduce acronyms properly and other times not properly.
He should definitely hire a good freelance editor to help him polish this, it could have been a. 4-star if he had.